Year 5 have spent the last few weeks learning about poems and poetry devices so they could write their own poems about visiting another planet. All the pupils have worked really hard researching about their planets and bringing them to life through personification, similes and metaphors.
Here are some poems Miss Franks and Miss Halloway have received. Miss Franks has also posted some videos of pupils performing their poetry on a previous blog post.
The sky reminds me of stars,
Acting really bright.
Mercury the ball of paint,
Acts like a firefly, different from the others.
I am free with mercury,
Feeling like home.
Mercury is always dancing,
In the system is a blast to have a planet as a friend.
Leaving space, leaving amazed,
The depressing feeling hit me.
Mercury will not give up dancing,
Seeing the green and blue of Earth coming closer.
Jupiter all covered in gas,
is massive in size and mass,
I look at him through my telescope in the dark night;
the dark, soot, black night,
The sky is black,
but I have some light,
my lamp is very bright,
when I see his face,
it makes me jump,
because he is really close up,
he’s 4.2 to 6.2 au away,
but that doesn’t stop me seeing him, yay,
he smiles at me and I smile back,
I really think he likes to be out in that galaxy so black,
he has lots of hankies,
for blowing his nose,
for he supports the Yankees.
The gigantic noise that came from the jets,
were louder than I wanted to bet,
when I got into space I gave a huge cheer,
for it had taken two days to get here,
now I can hear a low whistling sound,
because I am now Jupiter bound,
the sound I heard was like a low hooting sound,
like hundreds of Owls were soaring past me,
in search of a shopping spree,
when I reached his magnetic force,
which was 14 times the size of earth,
and I’m not talking about its berth.
In the distance in the fog,
which is sort of like a bog,
I can see a rocky core,
AARGH I feel so unsure,
I’m going to explore,
diamonds rain down on me,
this is going to be supapaaa on Jupiter.
As fast as a cheetah,
I soar through the air,
leaving Jupiter behind forever,
I fly swiftly past meteoroids and comets galore,
In a few days more,
I’ll be ashore,
When I leave him he starts to cry,
“So” I say “goodbye,”
As I sail through the air,
with the wind in my hair,
I really want to see a huge fluffy bear,
I dream of the bangs and the crashes of earth,
As I’m back home,
I heard Jupiter moan.
When I come out at night I see her hiding in her house,
Sad and alone , she looks so small and afraid like a mouse,
When the morning light fills the sky she sits and waits,
She hides and cries but no one hears her,
In her little house so blue and dark she lies waiting for someone,
But no one comes,
I feel so unhappy, like a sad movie
She’s dejected with no friends.
When I stand here on Earth she is 4.5716 billion km.
In a rocket I sit coming to you,
I see the night sky dancing around me,
I hear the stars whispering and giggling as I go past,
I see the planets chatting and walking whilst they orbit the sun,
But no Neptune.
The Earth way behind me no turning back,
As I get closer i see her neighbouring planets,
Jupiter and his beautiful 67 moons,
Saturn with her spinning rings,
And Uranus and his cold temperature.
I see you there in front of me,
I land beside you standing outside your door.
My feet steadily touched dear Neptunes yard,
I felt myself shivering as I moved around.
No wonder she was hiding in her tiny, grey house,
I saw her peeping out her boarded window,
I waved and she disappeared.
I began exploring her planet,
But then I heard something,
I walked to the noise and saw a kitten
with one eye like a cyclops.
I picked it up and saw its collar,
its name was Neptune Jr. I put it on the dusty, blue ground and
it hopped and skipped around before
disappearing in Neptune’s bedroom window.
It’s time to say goodbye to this planet,
I must go back to Earth,
Neptunes eyes glowing with tears as her
only friend leaves,
As my rocket takes of she cries,
I’ll be back I shout from inside.
I’m now travelling through space again,
I see the other planets talking and chatting.
I begin to cry.
Goodbye Neptune. Hello Earth.
The sky is lit up by the light of the moon,
a few twinkling stars dancing through the night sky,
the moon is a fascinating thing you see,
a beautiful sight to be seen by you and me,
a saucer of milk floating in the gloomy, dark sky,
it dances through the night,
like a ballerina dancing on a big stage
looking down at her audience ,
the moon makes me feel so sleepy
as sleepy as a hedgehog ready to hibernate.
The rocket fires up, rattling, shaking and roaring like a giant beast awaking from his sleep,
shaking like a leaf I am thrust through the atmosphere
in a colossal towering rocket,
earth hanging in the distance like it’s being held by an invisible string,
stars shooting past so fast like they’re being fired from a gun,
then there it is I stare in awe 4.53 billion years old,
The Moon……and then deafening silence.
As I step out onto the grey, dusty surface of the magnificent moon,
the emptiness of this desolate atmosphere hits me,
I feel as sick as a dog as I hear the echoing of wolves crying in the distance,
moon dust puffing up beneath my feet,
like a smoke machine being turned on,
adrenalin swishing through my nervous, shaking body,
hundreds of craters cover the surface,
I float around them like a balloon bouncing in the wind.
Tired and ready for home,
I leave my friend behind,
the engines rumble,vibrate and erupt like a volcano beneath me,
streams of stars shoot past me illuminating the dark atmosphere,
closer and closer I get and there I see it, a blue ball with swirls of colour,
home to you and me.
The Glossy Silver Moon
The moon the moon is shining up there
The moon can be seen by a wild bear
The moon can be seen anywhere
Even in Australia where they will be asleep
Where they won’t hear any cars beep
The moon cannot be seen in the ocean deep
It is like the moon whispers to you in your sleep
To tell you it’s time to sleep
And not to weep
Travelling through space at the speed of sound
Where you’re heading to the moon, all round
Where no king will be crowned
If you look down you’ll see the ground fading
with people underneath you looking up and waving
it might feel like you’re racing
The earth is looking as small as a pea
on my way there i will be having my tea
In my rocket I feel like a pea…
…in a pod
The moon looks like an elephant grey golf ball
Floating in space like a puffa fish in a pool
Once I’ve landed on the moon I won’t be using any rocket fuel
You will realise that you don’t live on a flat land
The base of the moon may feel like dry sand
When you step off the rocket on to this new land
All I can hear is black silence, all i can see is mother earth
Lonely like a leaf blown off a tree, all i can feel is dizzy from the low gravity
Now that I’m on the moon a new adventure shall begin
Looking around and all I see is darkness upon me
No aliens to be found but yet to see
Now I take my first steps successfully
Nothing to hear, nothing to smell except the suit I am in
Movement is tough you feel like a robot
Every step is like going through mud, wading
Being lonely is not fun, nobody to talk to
The adventures I’m having are extraordinary
The experience is priceless, but if you get stuck there is no one to help you
I’m travelling in my spaceship on my way home
I can see the stone grey moon where I’ve just been
Spinning around like a stuntman in a movie scene
Now that I am landing it felt quicker than reality
It was fun up there, but no fun alone
I had an amazing adventure, but now I’m back home
Stepping out of the spaceship the high gravity makes me dizzy
Up on the moon I was never that busy
Back to my home to see my wonderful friends and family
Disco Dancing Moon……..
When I see the Moon arrive..
Her face is glowing like a flamboyant disco ball. Sparkling bright in the ebony night sky. Sometimes I can’t see her, where she is hiding..
But when she does appear, it makes me think of birthday times, dancing around in the disco room.
I feel happy and calm when she appears.
It is my call to bed time, which I think I will ignore, as I’d love to join the party
and have a joyful bash.
She wears a dazzling party dress. As she parties the night away.
I’m in a more casual suit, my pajamas. Every night to her is like an academy award show. Dazzling twinkly stars surround her.
Her enemies are the marshmallow clouds that hide her beautiful face, from the human eyes.
She brightens up the night, like a lightbulb lightens up your room.
When it is night she appears, she illuminates and shows the way for our nocturnal friends.
After her wakeful night, you can even sometimes see her sleeping in the day.
Lucas’ second poem
Round Beautiful Moon
The moon is as round as a football
The moon shone like a light bulb
The moon’s surface is dusty as a dust ball
The moon is as old as dinosaurs
You can move on the moon like a piece of paper falling from a height
The moon is as white as snow
The moon’s surface looks like sand paper
The journey to the moon as is like a roller coaster
Travelling to the moon is takes a long time like a queue waiting for a new ride
The moon is as lonely as a forest
The moon is as deserted as a building site
Ruby has voice recorded her poem ‘The Moon’
Zach’s video can be watch here: Video (2)
We are looking forward to any more poems that are being sent in. Year 5 should be very proud of themselves, they have worked very hard on their poetry, well done!